Any adcvice to make my essay better?

It's a good start, but you need to actually describe things. It's a long essay, so I'll just talk about the first paragraph. In the sentence starting "I remember everything about that street..." you should describe the smells and the sounds. Say something like, "In just thinking about it, I can smell that freshly cut gr and hear the neighborhood kids playing tag. I hear Mr. Robinson yelling at the kids, telling them to get off his lawn." Stuff like that, that's the stuff that people remember about the street they grew up on. Add details.